The Green Door… First Draft, A Work in Progress, Day 2

 

Deep in thought, she didn’t notice the old man sitting quietly on a dirty stoop across the street, both showing their years. He watched the scene and smiled a half-smile, with a look of knowing in his eyes….

 

Notes to self:

  • synonym for dirty? possibly…
  • Is ‘both’ unclear, misplaced?

 

 

TGIF!

🙂

 

2 Comments

  1. Yes the “both” is confusing. Don’t know if you see my thoughts because WP makes me sign in and then when I get back to your page whatever I wrote is gone…

  2. Thanks, Natine, for the writing feedback! Yes, I do see your comments and click Like/Reply or just Like at the moment, if reading at red lights or at work. 😊

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