The Green Door… First Draft, A Work in Progress

This is a different kind of post for me – the first few lines of a work in progress – lines that have been rolling around in my head for several months, that I finally sat down to give a voice to this morning. No idea where it’s going, but I can feel a short story bubbling below the surface….

 

There it was! The green door she had dreamed of so often! that haunted her dreams.

“Wait! Stop!” she shouted excitedly to the bus driver.

Fellow passengers looked at her with surprise. Is she okay? Why is she shouting? Why is she interrupting our commute? Don’t make us a late, their faces said.   (not sure how to write this ‘inner dialogue’ yet… need to research and practice)

All but one passenger. Sitting quietly, invisible to those around her, an old woman watched the scene and smiled a half-smile, with a look of knowing in her eyes….  (this is my favorite line so far!)

Have a great day!

 

4 Comments

  1. Thank you, Kelly. I appreciate your feedback! I tend to edit often and want to put my process out there. Working toward power-packed brevity. 😊

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