The Green Door… First Draft, A Work in Progress

This is a different kind of post for me – the first few lines of a work in progress – lines that have been rolling around in my head for several months, that I finally sat down to give a voice to this morning. No idea where it’s going, but I can feel a short story bubbling below the surface….


There it was! The green door she had dreamed of so often! that haunted her dreams.

“Wait! Stop!” she shouted excitedly to the bus driver.

Fellow passengers looked at her with surprise. Is she okay? Why is she shouting? Why is she interrupting our commute? Don’t make us a late, their faces said.   (not sure how to write this ‘inner dialogue’ yet… need to research and practice)

All but one passenger. Sitting quietly, invisible to those around her, an old woman watched the scene and smiled a half-smile, with a look of knowing in her eyes….  (this is my favorite line so far!)

Have a great day!


Robin is a lifelong learner, seasoned educator, writer, artist, and US Navy veteran. She writes and creates to quiet her noisy mind while trying to figure out this crazy thing called life. Some days, it's clear... other days, not so much!


  • kellygriffiths

    I appreciated your sharing the strikethroughs. I’m on a sort of slash journey myself, realizing I’m often way too wordy. Nice blog.

  • RobinLK

    Thank you, Kelly. I appreciate your feedback! I tend to edit often and want to put my process out there. Working toward power-packed brevity. 😊

  • Natine

    Have tons of slash marks when doing mine — 150 words or less isn’t easy! Hahahaha…

  • RobinLK

    Yep, brevity is tough, isn’t it?! 😉

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